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Re: Dead
Left broken, L eft for dead, They put a bullet in my head. The sun goes dark. Then sky turns red. And all I can do is wish I was ...
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Re: fast pounding hearts
With quick moving hands And urgent lips , As if tossed in bed, W e cling to each other. We are sweaty and the S heets are dirty. But we ...
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Re: In the beginning. ( This is just a first phase of a piece)
This is a very good way to begin a short story and/or chapter. I'd like to see more of this.
Dec 11, 2008 -
Re: American Love
Thanks for all the comments my friends, I really just came up with this from the top of my head so I can understand if it seems like it was ...
Dec 10, 2008 -
Re: American Love
This is my first piece here on YWS, so I welcome any and all constructive criticism: American Love Where did the American love go? It was a simple love. I ...
Dec 10, 2008 -
Re: The Bleeding Rose
First off, I wanted to say that the first time I read this story I almost cried. The idea you have here is really good, sadly the way you've written ...
Dec 10, 2008 -
Re: The Journal of a Spartan (edited)
Hey, let me just start off my saying I'm a big fan of the Halo story, its one of my favorites as far as video game plots go. Sometimes I ...
Dec 9, 2008
